A New Leash on Life (microfiction)



The beguiling call came again. Lucky sniffed the air. He whined, pacing at the end of his tether.

With a sudden surge of power, he sprang, and heard a loud crack.

The broken collar tumbled to the dirt. Lucky bounded over the ridge to meet his lady.




Writing Prompt: Create a 47-word micro story that contains an object the main character is happier without.

Comments

  1. unfoldingfromthefog.wordpress.comNovember 6, 2019 at 7:33 PM

    I'm not sure crack is the right sound for the collar snapping, but I like the image of the dog breaking free to meet his love.

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  2. KB BaltzNovember 6, 2019 at 9:56 PM

    Dirty dog...sorry, I couldn’t help it.

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  3. LaissezFaireNovember 7, 2019 at 10:22 AM

    I enjoyed the doggie perspective and how you revealed the ultimate motivation. You cadn't keep a Dog Juan down. :D

    I bet you could do away with "heard a loud crack" and just go right into the collar in the dirt and use those four words for something else if you wanted.

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  4. NorthieNovember 7, 2019 at 11:31 AM

    Great that you made your hero a dog. ;-) Yes, what sound would a broken collar make?

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  5. ChristineNovember 7, 2019 at 12:33 PM

    I love this challenge because there's always something that surprises me. I would never have thought of this!

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