Adulting (poetry challenge)



My kids’ bookshelves are filled with books,
and their heads with stories I’ve told them.
I sneak zucchini into their muffins and cakes,
And send them off to school and bed on time.

When the kids are out of earshot,
their daddy and I giggle at dirty jokes.
Alone, I reread my favorite children’s books
And dance free-spirited around the living room.

My inner child needs nurturing too.




Poetry challenge: Sevenling

Comments

  1. NorthieAugust 29, 2019 at 9:40 AM

    I liked the idea that parents have and need a role outside that. Being adult doesn't have to mean resisting impulses to be daft. ;-)
    I think you maybe wrote the same kind of poem I did last week before I realised - a sevenling has 7 lines?

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    1. JenAugust 30, 2019 at 6:41 AM

      One of my favorite quotes: "When I became a man I put away childish things, including the fear of childishness and the desire to be very grown up." (C.S. Lewis)

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  2. ChristineAugust 29, 2019 at 11:59 AM

    Hi Jen! I love the contrasts you've set up here (especially as a parent myself). It's the perfect adult vs child dichotomy. And that last line resolves that contrast nicely, sort of marrying the two concepts.

    Here's the thing, though - this isn't actually a sevenling. :) A sevenling has seven lines, not nine - two stanzas of three lines, plus the final stanza of one line. One thing you might consider to rework this into a proper sevenling is to play with the sentence structure. That is, rather than complete narrative sentences, try giving us three images in each of the first two stanzas. This could help you whittle it down into the 3+3+1 format in part by eliminating extra words. (Does that make sense?)

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    1. JenAugust 29, 2019 at 5:02 PM

      LOL! Oops. Wrote this one at the last minute and failed to reread the rules :)

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  3. unfoldingfromthefog.wordpress.comAugust 29, 2019 at 7:21 PM

    Sevenling or not, I did enjoy the contrast of child and parent.

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