The Diplomat (poetry challenge)



She greets her group with gusto.
She snacks on small talk.
She chats to charm the crowd.

She sneaks away to hear herself think.
She departs the party when her fuel runs low.
She swallows solitude to slake her thirst.

The warring factions achieve détente when they each get some of what they want.




Poetry challenge: Sevenling




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  1. Srivalli RekhaAugust 7, 2019 at 9:28 PM

    Life! Love the wonderful contrast between what she gives and takes.

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  2. Sanch @ Sanch WritesAugust 8, 2019 at 3:52 AM

    The contrasts are great in the two stanzas. I also really liked your choice of words: "swallows solitude to slake her thirst" and "chats to charm" It's got a good rhythm to it.

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  3. unfoldingfromthefog.wordpress.comAugust 8, 2019 at 4:35 PM

    This is just how I feel sometimes. I'm an extrovert, but I related to the second stanza introvert tendencies as well.

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  4. ChristineAugust 8, 2019 at 5:19 PM

    You set up some great contrasts in your opposing stanzas with some really lovely phrasing (especially that first stanza). You did a really nice job with your poetic devices without going overboard (your alliteration, for example). Since you asked for concrit, I might say that the last line felt a little clumsy to me, though I see what you're getting at. I think it could have been more effective if you tweaked it to reflect the experience of a different sort of diplomat - the personality type vs the profession, if you see what I mean.

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